[ 原諒 Forgiveness ] (Reviewer: KADOKAWA)

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Contest sponsor KADOKAWA gave detailed advice on 原諒 Forgiveness, an entry for the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2020.

 

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原諒 Forgiveness

Pen name: 小河少年

School name: Chaoyang University of Technology

Country/Region: Taiwan

Language: Chinese (Traditional)

 

Overall feedback

Page 5

1. The background is optional if you're emphasizing the distance between the two.

 

 

 

Page 8

2. This mixture of reality and fantasy is unique to comics, very good.

 

 

 

Page 9

3. Showing what waits in the future as with the top two panels would give the page stronger contrast.

 

 

 

Page 13

4. The suit is the same black as before, making it harder to understand it’s him grown up. Adding design changes other than short pants > long pants would help.

 

 

 

KADOKAWA

 

International Comic/Manga School Contest 2020 Winners

 

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