Glénat provided its detailled critique on "Plumas", one of the entries to the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2021.
Pen name: Helz
School: Escola Joso
① Story is clear and animals are very cute, good job !
Generally, I just think that cases should be circled (with a light line) to avoid images with white on white background (as I marked later)
② Maybe let the tail of mama fox go through the cases in front? To create relief
③ Rework that angle
④ Keep the notes going through the cases, but make them come from the bird, without bubbles.
⑤ Add a note here, just to make reader understand music stops as the fox looks at them?
⑥ Work on that face to make it cuter (or younger), it looks like an adult here.
Add some expressivity?
⑦ The story and art of the comics seems for children but the end is a little bit sad... :(
We don't know if the baby fox will fall or fly...
International Comic/Manga School Contest 2021 Winners