Promises on Tables and Desks (Review: BookLive Co., Ltd.)

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Contest sponsor BookLive Co., Ltd gave detailed advice on Promises on Tables and Desks, an entry for the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2020.


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Promises on Tables and Desks

Pen name: Seturic

Country/Region: Philippines

School: iACADEMY

Language: English


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Pages 1-2

1. You could add depth to the character by adding two pages of childhood episodes related to desks.


2. This intro narration could be bigger and on page 3 after the recollection.


3. In addition to the childhood episode, a close-up of the character's face would be nice.



Pages 5-6

4. Specifically, I’d like to see an episode about why he thought this desk was the best one for him.



Pages 9-10

5. This is too sudden. I thought the value that he was looking for in desks was fundamental happiness and not just money, as mentioned in the interview scene.


6. Couldn’t this be a more simple depiction of the important papers being blown off the desk and out the window by the wind?



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