Contest sponsor BookLive Co., Ltd gave detailed advice on Promises on Tables and Desks, an entry for the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2020.
Promises on Tables and Desks
Pen name: Seturic
1. You could add depth to the character by adding two pages of childhood episodes related to desks.
2. This intro narration could be bigger and on page 3 after the recollection.
3. In addition to the childhood episode, a close-up of the character's face would be nice.
4. Specifically, I’d like to see an episode about why he thought this desk was the best one for him.
5. This is too sudden. I thought the value that he was looking for in desks was fundamental happiness and not just money, as mentioned in the interview scene.
6. Couldn’t this be a more simple depiction of the important papers being blown off the desk and out the window by the wind?
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