메이트 (Critique: SHUEISHA)
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SHUEISHA, sponsor of the International Comic/School Contest 2023, gave their critique for the entry, "메이트".
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Mate / 메이트
Artist: O Hong Seung / 오홍승
School: CHOSUN UNIVERSITY
Country/Region: South Korea
Language: Korean
CRITIQUES
Consider that people are reading this on the phone and make the drawings, speech bubbles, and lines larger.
Why does he bite? I didn't really understand this.
I love this way of expressing this scene!
☆ Think about the smartphone format and make the panels, bubbles, and text larger to account for that.
☆ However I did not have major problems with the drawings or story.
It was an enjoyable reading experience.
☆It was a little difficult to understand the father's change. The motif of parent-child interaction through a chess match was good, but it would have been more helpful to the reader if how the father changed as a result of the chess match had been clearer.
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