我們所不知道的藍色 (Critique: Tapas Media)
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Sponsor Tapas Media provided its detailled critique on "我們所不知道的藍色", one of the entries to the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2021.
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我們所不知道的藍色
Pen name: neon
School: CAFA
Country/Region: China
Language: Chinese
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Pages 2-3
①The panel reading order for this page is unclear (top to bottom first? or left to right first?).
②There’s too much white space here—the panel above can be extended to fill some of this space.
③The panel below can be shifted up and extended to avoid an awkward cutoff and show more of their bodies.
Pages 4-5
④The panel above can be extended to the bottom of the page.
⑤These two panels are really wonderful and expressive!
Pages 6-7
⑥The bubble to the right can be placed closer to the bottom right corner so that it’s not between the characters.
⑦There are too many angle changes between these last 3 panels, which is confusing for readers.
Page 8
⑧Really beautiful ending panel!
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