我們所不知道的藍色 (Critique: Tapas Media)

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Sponsor Tapas Media provided its detailled critique on "我們所不知道的藍色", one of the entries to the International Comic/Manga School Contest 2021.

 

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我們所不知道的藍色

Pen name: neon

School: CAFA

Country/Region: China

Language: Chinese

 

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Pages 2-3

①The panel reading order for this page is unclear (top to bottom first? or left to right first?).

 

②There’s too much white space here—the panel above can be extended to fill some of this space.

 

③The panel below can be shifted up and extended to avoid an awkward cutoff and show more of their bodies.

 

 

 

Pages 4-5

④The panel above can be extended to the bottom of the page.

 

⑤These two panels are really wonderful and expressive!

 

 

 

Pages 6-7

⑥The bubble to the right can be placed closer to the bottom right corner so that it’s not between the characters.

 

⑦There are too many angle changes between these last 3 panels, which is confusing for readers.

 

 

 

Page 8

⑧Really beautiful ending panel!

 

 

 

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International Comic/Manga School Contest 2021 Winners

 

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