An Escape Plan (Critique: BookLive)
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BookLive, sponsor of the International Comic/School Contest 2022, gave their critique for the entry, "An Escape Plan."
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An Escape Plan
Pen name: Yunika
School: Glacier peak
Country/Region: United States of America
Language: English
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Pages 4 & 5
1) Show us where the dog and boy are in the room.
2) If you had reversed the order of panel 1 and 2, with the reader moving from the close-up of the light to a view of the whole room, it would’ve made for an easier read.
3) Zoom right into his expression on this panel - he’s making a decision, so this is important. This expression should have as big an impact as possible.
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